2009-2010 Future City Competition™
Essay and Narrative

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The judging teams will complete this section. Judges will answer these questions and assign a point value for each question. This sample judging form is provided to the students so they know the components of the judging criteria. Please use whole numbers, not fractions. New! Teams will need to place the word count at the end of the essay that they submit.

Essay: Part 1
700 - 1000 Word Essay (0-70 points) “Providing an affordable green living space for people who have lost their home due to a disaster or financial emergency”. A score of zero is assigned if none of the criteria is met.

Values

I. Selection of Living Space
Select and define a living space of their choice using “green” materials, processes and standards to address a societal need.

1. Does the essay define the living space and its location as it pertains to the citizens in need (e.g. homeless)?

a. Living Space

(1 point) Living space is defined/named
(0 points) Living space is NOT defined

b. Location

(2 points) Location is well identified
(1 point) Location is briefly identified
(0 points) Location is NOT identified

c. Needs of Citizens

(3 points) Relates well to the needs of the citizens
(2 points) Adequately relates to the needs of the citizens
(1 point) Briefly relates to the needs of the citizens
(0 points) Does NOT address the needs of the citizens

2. Does the essay explain how the living space can adapt to various sizes and styles, and what is the expected lifespan of the living space?

a. Brief Explanation of Characteristics

(3 points) Three characteristics are briefly addressed
(2 points) Two characteristics are briefly addressed
(1 point) One of the three characteristics is briefly addressed
(0 points) NO explanation of variation in size, style or lifespan

b. In Depth Explanation of Characteristics

(2 points) In depth explanation of all three characteristics
(1 point) In depth explanation of at least one characteristics
(0 points) NO in depth explanation of any characteristic

3. Does the essay discuss the target demographic of the living space/housing?

(3 points) Target demographic is well discussed
(2 points) Target demographic is adequately discussed
(1 point) Target demographic is briefly discussed
(0 points) Living space target demographic is NOT identified

II. Research
Research of existing green building sustainable processes, materials, and technologies.

 

4. Is there evidence of research into existing green building technologies and criteria used today?

 

a. Evidence of Research

(2 points) Research of at least two green technologies
(1 point) Research of one green technology
(0 points) NO evidence of research

b. In Depth Research

(2 points) Research of at least two green technology topics is in-depth
(1 point) Research of one green technology topic is in-depth
(0 points) Research is NOT in depth

c. Examples

(1 point) Examples are presented
(0 points) NO examples are presented

III. Green Materials and Resources
Develop and investigate a new technology or improvement to a technology to incorporate into the residential space to insure sustainable/green design. The technology or innovation should aim to satisfy the “Green Ideals”.

5. Does the essay describe innovation in “Green” materials and resources and how they function?

a. Identified

(1 point) A “Green” material/resource innovation is identified
(0 points) A “Green” material/resource innovation is NOT identified

b. Description

(3 points) Material/ resource innovation function well described
(2 points) Material/resource innovation function adequately described
(1 point) Material/resource innovation function briefly described
(0 points) NO description of how the material/resource innovation will function

c. Examples

(1 point) Examples are presented
(0 points) NO examples are presented

6. Does the essay describe how the chosen materials will enable the living space to adapt to the community?

(3 points) How the living space adapts to the community is well described
(2 points) Adequate description of how the living space adapts to the community
(1 point) Brief description of how the living space adapts to the community
(0 points) NO description of how the living space adapts to the community

7. Does the essay discuss the impact of the chosen materials on construction waste?

(3 points) Impact on waste is well discussed
(2 points) Adequate discussion of impact on waste
(1 point) Brief discussion of impact on waste
(0 points) NO discussion of impact on waste

8. Does the essay describe the impact of the chosen materials on the living space aesthetics (interior and exterior)?

(3 points) The living space aesthetics are well described
(2 points) Adequate description of the living space aesthetics
(1 point) Brief description of the living space aesthetics
(0 points) NO description of the living space aesthetics

9. Does the essay describe what makes the chosen material an economic, efficient and sustainable choice?

a. Economy and Efficiency

(3 points) Economy and efficiency are well discussed
(2 points) Economy and efficiency are adequately discussed
(1 point) Economy and efficiency are briefly discussed
(0 points) Economy and efficiency are NOT discussed.

b. Sustainability

(3 points) Sustainability is well discussed
(2 points) Sustainability is adequately discussed
(1 point) Sustainability is briefly discussed
(0 points)Sustainability is NOT discussed

10. Does the essay describe the tradeoffs made between economic, efficient and sustainable in the selection of the chosen building materials?

(3 points) Tradeoffs between economics, efficiency, and sustainability are well discussed
(2 points) Tradeoffs between economics, efficiency, and sustainability are adequately discussed
(1 point) Tradeoffs between economics, efficiency, and sustainability are briefly discussed
(0 points) Tradeoffs between economics, efficiency, and sustainability are NOT discussed


11. Does the essay discuss the environmental footprint or impact of the living space?

(3 points) Environmental footprint is well discussed
(2 points) Adequate discussion of environmental footprint
(1 point) Brief discussion of environmental footprint
(0 points) NO discussion of environmental footprint

IV. Function and Value of the Living Space
Provide in-depth discussion of the function of the living space design or component(s) and its influence on the occupants and community.

12. Does the essay discuss the durability and maintenance of the living space?

(3 points) Durability and maintenance are well discussed
(2 points) Adequate discussion of durability and maintenance is provided
(1 point) Brief discussion of durability and maintenance is provided
(0 points) NO discussion of durability and maintenance is provided

13. Does the essay provide a description of the improvements to the quality of life of the living space occupants (including elderly and disabled)?

(3 points) Improvement in the quality of life for the occupants is well described
(2 points) Adequate description of improvement in the quality of life for the occupants.
(1 point) Brief description of improvement in the quality of life for the occupants
(0 points )NO description of improvement in the quality of life for the occupants.

14. Does the essay discussion include benefits of the living space design and its impact on the community and environment?

a. Community

(3 points) The benefits to the community are well discussed
(2 points) Adequate discussion of the benefits to the community
(1 point) Brief discussion of the benefits to the community
(0 points) NO discussion of benefits to the community provided by the living space

b. Environment

(3 points) The benefits to the environment are well discussed
(2 points) Adequate discussion of the benefits to the environment
(1 point) Brief discussion of the benefits to the environment
(0 points) NO discussion of benefits to the environment provided by the living space

V. Role of the Engineer
Identify an engineering discipline and its role in developing the living space design or components of the living space.

15. Does the essay discuss the role of one engineering discipline in the development of the living space?

a. Engineering Discipline

(1 point) An engineering discipline is identified
(0 points) An engineering discipline is NOT identified

b. Role of Engineer

(3 points) The role of the engineer in developing the living space or its components is well discussed
(2 points)The role of the engineer in developing the living space or its components is adequately discussed
(1 point) The role of the engineer in developing the living space or its components is briefly discussed
(0 points)The role of the engineer in developing the living space or its components NOT discussed

16. Well Written

(2 points) Exceptionally written and organized
(1 point) Satisfactorily written and organized
(0 points) Poorly written and organized

17. Grammar

(2 points) No grammatical errors.
(1 point) Some grammatical errors
(0 points) Many grammatical errors.

18. Spelling

(2 points) No spelling errors.
(1 point) Some spelling errors
(0 points) Many spelling errors.

19. Length

(1 point) Between 700 and 1000 words
(0 points) Fewer than 700 words or more than 1000 words

20. List of references

a. References

(1 point) At least three appropriate references
(0 points) Less than three appropriate references

a. Listing

(1 point) References are correctly listed
(0 points) References are NOT correctly listed

TOTAL ESSAY POINTS (0-70) =

 

Narrative: Part 2
A score of zero is assigned if none of the criteria is met.

Values

1. . Describe the City’s physical components & infrastructure. (Physical components of the city could include but are not limited to parks and landmarks, recreation opportunities or attractions, and other highlights.)

(5 points) Excellent description of City and its physical components & infrastructure.
(4 points) Good description of City and its physical components & infrastructure.
(3 points) General description of City and its physical components & infrastructure meets expectations.
(2 points) Fair description of City and its physical components & infrastructure.
(1 point) Poor description of City and its physical components & infrastructure.
(0 points) No description.

2. Describe the City and its services including information such as an overview of their city’s quality of life and issues of health, safety, education, etc.

(5 points) Excellent description of City and many of its services
(4 points) Good description of City and some of its services
(3 points) General description of City and some of its services meets expectations
(2 points) Fair description of City and services
(1 point) Poor description of City and services
(0 points) No description.

3. Description of the City’s basic information such as population, year, and location?

(2 points) Exceptional description.
(1 point) Some description.
(0 points) No description.

4. Organized and well written

(2 points) Exceptionally organized and well written.
(1 point) Satisfactorily organized and written.
(0 points) Poorly organized and written.

5. Is the narrative free of grammatical errors?

(2 points) No grammatical errors.
(1 point) Some grammatical errors.
(0 points) Many grammatical errors.

6. Is the narrative free of spelling errors?

(2 points) No spelling errors.
(1 point) Some spelling errors.
(0 points) Many spelling errors.

7. Is the narrative between 300 - 500 words?

(2 points) Within the 300-500 word limit.
(0 points) Less than 300 words or greater than 500 words.

TOTAL NARRATIVE POINTS (0-20) =

TOTAL ESSAY AND NARRATIVE POINTS (0-90) =

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